Magpie Tales: My First

by The Urban Cowboy on August 6, 2010 · 75 comments

Since this is my first attempt at Magpie Tales, I thought it fitting to do a piece called, My First. I hope you enjoy this little shorty for Magpie Tales.

The reddish, brown leaves scream to me like popcorn popping under the heat, as I casually walk my familiar path. My secret place in the forest has been a dear friend of mine since, well, since I can’t remember, really.

I can’t help but feel a little melancholy today. It is days like this I miss her most, my first. She slowly fades from the cobwebs of my mind, and I have to force myself to remember. Sure, there have been many others since, but none that captured my heart, my attentions like her.

I never knew her name, only her beauty. Her dress was as red as fresh chili peppers, and twice as hot. Her chestnut hair flowed shoulder length, intoxicating my senses each time I buried my face in it for a deep inhalation. Oh how I miss that sweet smell of my first.

I wonder if she remembers me too. How could she not? It really doesn’t matter much; the only thing that matters is I must recapture the feelings from my first. Sometimes I can’t help but laugh, while covered in sadness, and think how differently my life would have turned out if she were never my first.

Would I be the same man? Would there have been the others? My mind wonders, like a lost creature in the forest. But I know where I’m going. I’m headed to my secret place in the forest. While there, I’m sheltered and protected from my spying memories of others. Only she is allowed to dance with my reflections in my secret place.

As I round the last bend, I almost stumble on a root that has formed a large hump in the damp soil. This brings a smile, born from a similar incident with my first. The way she tripped, at almost the exact spot. I find myself replaying it, as my heart races faster in tempo with each remaining step.

I spy the water can, my marker, and my heart attempts to jump out of my mouth like a feisty bull frog. My melancholy is swept away like dust under the pummeling of a thunderstorm; excitement and adrenaline now chase each other as I approach the spot of my first.

My First

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The only thing that matters is we are together again.

As I begin clearing the area, the knots in my stomach climaxes into excitement bursting through my chest. I can remember everything about my first now. She doesn’t look or smell the same, but it doesn’t matter. The only thing that matters is we are together again.

As the earth spits forward the remains of my first, I am at peace once again.

This is a Magpie Tale

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Citymom2 August 6, 2010 at 10:22 pm

Good work.
“Only she is allowed to dance with my reflections in my secret place.”
may be the best sentence you’ve written. Keep it up.
Ellen

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The Urban Cowboy August 6, 2010 at 10:25 pm

Why thank you kindly, City Mom!

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Christina August 6, 2010 at 10:27 pm

Agree with Citymom. What an outstanding use of language

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The Urban Cowboy August 6, 2010 at 10:37 pm

You can call me…The Cowboy Poet, lol ;)

Patience Ray August 7, 2010 at 12:42 am

Psycho killer! this is great, really awesome read. welcome to magpie tales, happy to have you around.

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The Urban Cowboy August 7, 2010 at 6:28 am

Thanks, and welcome here, Ray! Glad you enjoyed it.

Michelle August 6, 2010 at 10:49 pm

Is this a real forest? Such beautiful language and depth. :) I’m going to have to checkout more Magpie Tales.

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The Urban Cowboy August 6, 2010 at 10:54 pm

Hey Michelle, no not a real forest…well, the secret place isn’t, anyways. Glad you enjoyed it. :)

Lynn August 6, 2010 at 11:23 pm

Between you and UP I’m feeling like a toddler! What in the world are you talking about in this post?? Seriously.

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The Urban Cowboy August 7, 2010 at 12:02 am

See comment below.

Shrinky August 6, 2010 at 11:47 pm

Oh my God, you really had me there! Who would have thought this romantic guy was actually a serial killer?? Chilling! What a wonderful twist. You are a fine writer, indeed (grin)!

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The Urban Cowboy August 7, 2010 at 12:03 am

{tipping hat} :)

Julliette O (LarvK) August 7, 2010 at 4:04 am

Wow Urban Cowboy, your first is indeed a captivating magpie. Scary to what he turns out to be, amazing use of language. Can i say it again? I love the way you tell a tale, you always give me the chills good and bad it doesn’t matter, it’s that you engross me in your tales :)

Bravo!!!
Space Cowgirl~

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The Urban Cowboy August 7, 2010 at 6:32 am

I love hearing I give you the chills. :) Glad you enjoyed it, Space Cowgirl {kissing hand}.

ann August 7, 2010 at 4:14 am

I have to admit that I was clueless about what a magpie tale was but following the links and reading the comments I figured it out. Let me just saw WOW

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The Urban Cowboy August 7, 2010 at 6:32 am

Glad you liked it, Ann! :)

TechnoBabe August 7, 2010 at 6:06 am

Gads, “would there have been others” I think there would have been don’t you? Really good writing leading us through the typical romantic story only to be frightened at the end.

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The Urban Cowboy August 7, 2010 at 6:36 am

Yes, TechnoBabe…”…there have been many others since…”, but he also wonders if that would still hold true if there wasn’t his first. If not for her, would he be different? Who knows, he doesn’t even know, but he wonders. Glad you enjoyed this, Techno!

willow August 7, 2010 at 6:55 am

Oh my gosh. A Stephen King-esque ending. I wasn’t expecting it! Beautiful writing. Welcome to Magpie, Cowboy.

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The Urban Cowboy August 7, 2010 at 6:58 am

Thanks Willow, glad you enjoyed it, and welcome here as well!

Siren August 7, 2010 at 10:28 am

loved the story, the images in my head of the sights and sounds and smells of the woods traveling to a place no one knows just to be alone, with the jukebox of your memories and close your eyes as the record drops.

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The Urban Cowboy August 7, 2010 at 10:57 am

Glad you enjoyed my little tale, Siren.

AngelMay August 7, 2010 at 8:33 am

Hmmm….. my first hint that something wasn’t quite right was the telling that he buried his face in her hair yet he didn’t even know her name. Ahhh….hello? This does not compute. So I continued reading, wondering… what’s the matter with this picture…?

Very nicely done – no need to hit us over the head with it. And you did not. You respected the intelligence of your audience. I have to say that I enjoyed this very much. Thus, I am commenting on a blog on which I *must* leave an email address – something I have refused (until this blog) to do.

Again, well done.

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The Urban Cowboy August 7, 2010 at 8:42 am

Welcome AngelMay! So glad you enjoyed this little tale.

I am humbled to hear you did something here that you wouldn’t elsewhere. Be assured, the email requirement is in place as an added security for spam, and will never be shared or abused in any manner.

Once again, thanks for stopping by and taking the time to comment.

brian August 7, 2010 at 9:19 am

hey cowboy…nice to see you over at magpie…great tale, love the twist at the end…deliciously creepy…like the descriptors as well….chili pepper and feisty bull frog…

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The Urban Cowboy August 7, 2010 at 10:56 am

I couldn’t resist, when I saw the photo I was hit with inspiration, so to speak.

suz August 7, 2010 at 10:52 am

obsession
you did this so well

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The Urban Cowboy August 7, 2010 at 10:58 am

Thank you suz, and welcome!

Debby August 7, 2010 at 10:58 am

You have the gift to write. The words flow beautifully with emotion.

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The Urban Cowboy August 7, 2010 at 11:00 am

Hi Debby…thank you so much for your lovely words {kissing hand}

Tumblewords August 7, 2010 at 11:17 am

Nice write!

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The Urban Cowboy August 7, 2010 at 11:23 am

Thanks, Tumblewords…and welcome!

christiejolulu August 7, 2010 at 3:36 pm

Wow beautiful!

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The Urban Cowboy August 8, 2010 at 11:07 am

Glad you liked.

Jingle August 7, 2010 at 6:08 pm

I spy the water can, my marker, and my heart attempts to jump out of my mouth like a …

My first time reading a magpie tale with full attention and absolute enjoyment…

u nailed it, very extraordinary and delicate descriptions…
your talent rocks here.
I love your short story.

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The Urban Cowboy August 8, 2010 at 11:08 am

Thanks Jingle, and nice to see you again!

gypsywoman August 8, 2010 at 4:11 am

hey cowboy – hmmmmm…..very well done! we all have those little secret paths – however, not all as littered with the remains of memories as yours seems – but, to each, his/her own! ;)

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The Urban Cowboy August 8, 2010 at 11:10 am

Thank you gypsywoman…ha, I’m laughing thinking about what you said. ;)

Donna (Texas) August 8, 2010 at 7:37 am

Beautifully written Brian!!! After reading this, I remembered My first…thanks for the memory…
HUG

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The Urban Cowboy August 8, 2010 at 11:12 am

Thanks Donna! Hopefully, your first didn’t meet the same fate. :)

Lyn August 8, 2010 at 9:06 am

Lovely bones go to heaven.. was the second as good? Is this guy a legend in his own mind? You did it….

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The Urban Cowboy August 8, 2010 at 11:12 am

err…thanks…I think?

Welcome Lyn!

Patti August 8, 2010 at 10:58 am

Stephen King, step aside. There’s a new macabre Cowboy in town. Very effective, with some beautiful language leading up to the shocker at the end.

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The Urban Cowboy August 8, 2010 at 11:17 am

Dang, Patti…I think you came up with my new name…The Macabre Cowboy! Glad you enjoyed this little tale. :)

otin August 8, 2010 at 12:37 pm

We all remember our firsts! (Says otin as he wipes off the bloody knife) lol

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The Urban Cowboy August 8, 2010 at 8:41 pm

Ha…right on, Otin!

Skye August 8, 2010 at 6:58 pm

A creepy story but you told it beautifully.

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The Urban Cowboy August 8, 2010 at 8:44 pm

Thanks Skye. I kinda like writing creepy stuff… :)

secret agent woman August 8, 2010 at 5:20 pm

Okay, that was very, very creepy.

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The Urban Cowboy August 8, 2010 at 8:42 pm

Creepy is good…right?

UP August 8, 2010 at 5:34 pm

Another eerie one…I like it.

UP

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The Urban Cowboy August 8, 2010 at 8:42 pm

Right on!

Catherine August 8, 2010 at 5:56 pm

Your first of many…..hopefully. Well done!

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The Urban Cowboy August 8, 2010 at 8:43 pm

Thanks Catherine, and welcome!

Shirley "Rodeo" Landis VanScoyk August 8, 2010 at 7:15 pm

GROSS!!!! she doesn’t smell the same!

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The Urban Cowboy August 8, 2010 at 8:45 pm

Hi Shirley, and welcome! Ha…yea, years buried in the ground will change the way you smell. ;)

The Wolf August 8, 2010 at 10:18 pm

This is my first time here to you’re site. I’m glad I took the time to stop by and read you’re short story, very cool the way you wrote it. I really enjoyed how you wrote it through the killer’s perspective. Creepy and cool all at once, good job.

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The Urban Cowboy August 9, 2010 at 9:07 am

Hey there Wolf, welcome! If I can get creepy and cool at the same time, I’m doing something right…right?

Thanks Wolf.

Kari Anne August 9, 2010 at 9:52 am

Well…that was different…but in a good way… Love the style you wrote in! I love your short stories…and even though some are about being killed or being the killer…they are interesting and suspenseful and I love them! Another GREAT story!!

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The Urban Cowboy August 9, 2010 at 10:36 am

Thanks Kari Anne, glad you enjoyed this little tale.

Ramona August 9, 2010 at 10:01 am

Okay, wasn’t expecting that twist. Well written and had me hanging on but, very different…..

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The Urban Cowboy August 9, 2010 at 10:37 am

LOL…yea, I strive to be a little different, but I have to admit that this one was different even for me. Glad you liked it.

Kathe W. August 9, 2010 at 10:53 am

OMG- a serial killer??? First I was thinking it was his first tomato, then a woman and then!!! A killer? Hoo boy you got me there! Sneaky you!
Wow!

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The Urban Cowboy August 9, 2010 at 10:56 am

Welcome Kathe!

Yes, I admit I do try to have a twist in my short stories.

Glad you enjoyed this little tale.

Helena August 9, 2010 at 11:33 am

I wished my first time had been this good! The twist here was brill. Yeehaa!

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The Urban Cowboy August 9, 2010 at 11:35 am

Hi Helena, and a BIG WELCOME!

Glad you likie…the yeehaa has me wondering if you’re a cowgirl…

Blond Duck August 9, 2010 at 1:16 pm

I like your motercycle!

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The Urban Cowboy August 9, 2010 at 1:19 pm

Hey there Blond Duck…thanks for the compliment…but I think you’re in the wrong room. :)

Amber August 10, 2010 at 1:45 am

Whoa…I totally fell into your trap here, and then I suddenly found myself thinking, wow, this could either be really romantic or super creepy. I will go with creepy. You definitely captured the voice of this very poetic serial killer and sent some shivers down this gal’s spine. ;)

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The Urban Cowboy August 10, 2010 at 5:09 am

Shivers are always good, especially down the spine. :)

Raven August 11, 2010 at 9:45 am

Utterly fantastic!! I loved it!!

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The Urban Cowboy August 12, 2010 at 10:39 pm

Glad you liked it, Raven!

Unknown Mami August 11, 2010 at 4:40 pm

Really creepy. Such sweet recollections of something so gruesome.

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The Urban Cowboy August 12, 2010 at 10:41 pm

Yea, I agree…and to think it came out my head? :)

carol August 17, 2010 at 10:23 am

Well written……..

Nice and sensitive, too, for a “cowboy” urban or otherwise LOL!

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