Since this is my first attempt at Magpie Tales, I thought it fitting to do a piece called, My First. I hope you enjoy this little shorty for Magpie Tales.
The reddish, brown leaves scream to me like popcorn popping under the heat, as I casually walk my familiar path. My secret place in the forest has been a dear friend of mine since, well, since I can’t remember, really.
I can’t help but feel a little melancholy today. It is days like this I miss her most, my first. She slowly fades from the cobwebs of my mind, and I have to force myself to remember. Sure, there have been many others since, but none that captured my heart, my attentions like her.
I never knew her name, only her beauty. Her dress was as red as fresh chili peppers, and twice as hot. Her chestnut hair flowed shoulder length, intoxicating my senses each time I buried my face in it for a deep inhalation. Oh how I miss that sweet smell of my first.
I wonder if she remembers me too. How could she not? It really doesn’t matter much; the only thing that matters is I must recapture the feelings from my first. Sometimes I can’t help but laugh, while covered in sadness, and think how differently my life would have turned out if she were never my first.
Would I be the same man? Would there have been the others? My mind wonders, like a lost creature in the forest. But I know where I’m going. I’m headed to my secret place in the forest. While there, I’m sheltered and protected from my spying memories of others. Only she is allowed to dance with my reflections in my secret place.
As I round the last bend, I almost stumble on a root that has formed a large hump in the damp soil. This brings a smile, born from a similar incident with my first. The way she tripped, at almost the exact spot. I find myself replaying it, as my heart races faster in tempo with each remaining step.
I spy the water can, my marker, and my heart attempts to jump out of my mouth like a feisty bull frog. My melancholy is swept away like dust under the pummeling of a thunderstorm; excitement and adrenaline now chase each other as I approach the spot of my first.
My First
The only thing that matters is we are together again.
As I begin clearing the area, the knots in my stomach climaxes into excitement bursting through my chest. I can remember everything about my first now. She doesn’t look or smell the same, but it doesn’t matter. The only thing that matters is we are together again.
As the earth spits forward the remains of my first, I am at peace once again.
This is a Magpie Tale
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Good work.
“Only she is allowed to dance with my reflections in my secret place.”
may be the best sentence you’ve written. Keep it up.
Ellen
Why thank you kindly, City Mom!
Agree with Citymom. What an outstanding use of language
You can call me…The Cowboy Poet, lol
Psycho killer! this is great, really awesome read. welcome to magpie tales, happy to have you around.
Thanks, and welcome here, Ray! Glad you enjoyed it.
Is this a real forest? Such beautiful language and depth.
I’m going to have to checkout more Magpie Tales.
Hey Michelle, no not a real forest…well, the secret place isn’t, anyways. Glad you enjoyed it.
Between you and UP I’m feeling like a toddler! What in the world are you talking about in this post?? Seriously.
See comment below.
Oh my God, you really had me there! Who would have thought this romantic guy was actually a serial killer?? Chilling! What a wonderful twist. You are a fine writer, indeed (grin)!
{tipping hat}
Wow Urban Cowboy, your first is indeed a captivating magpie. Scary to what he turns out to be, amazing use of language. Can i say it again? I love the way you tell a tale, you always give me the chills good and bad it doesn’t matter, it’s that you engross me in your tales
Bravo!!!
Space Cowgirl~
I love hearing I give you the chills.
Glad you enjoyed it, Space Cowgirl {kissing hand}.
I have to admit that I was clueless about what a magpie tale was but following the links and reading the comments I figured it out. Let me just saw WOW
Glad you liked it, Ann!
Gads, “would there have been others” I think there would have been don’t you? Really good writing leading us through the typical romantic story only to be frightened at the end.
Yes, TechnoBabe…”…there have been many others since…”, but he also wonders if that would still hold true if there wasn’t his first. If not for her, would he be different? Who knows, he doesn’t even know, but he wonders. Glad you enjoyed this, Techno!
Oh my gosh. A Stephen King-esque ending. I wasn’t expecting it! Beautiful writing. Welcome to Magpie, Cowboy.
Thanks Willow, glad you enjoyed it, and welcome here as well!
loved the story, the images in my head of the sights and sounds and smells of the woods traveling to a place no one knows just to be alone, with the jukebox of your memories and close your eyes as the record drops.
Glad you enjoyed my little tale, Siren.
Hmmm….. my first hint that something wasn’t quite right was the telling that he buried his face in her hair yet he didn’t even know her name. Ahhh….hello? This does not compute. So I continued reading, wondering… what’s the matter with this picture…?
Very nicely done – no need to hit us over the head with it. And you did not. You respected the intelligence of your audience. I have to say that I enjoyed this very much. Thus, I am commenting on a blog on which I *must* leave an email address – something I have refused (until this blog) to do.
Again, well done.
Welcome AngelMay! So glad you enjoyed this little tale.
I am humbled to hear you did something here that you wouldn’t elsewhere. Be assured, the email requirement is in place as an added security for spam, and will never be shared or abused in any manner.
Once again, thanks for stopping by and taking the time to comment.
hey cowboy…nice to see you over at magpie…great tale, love the twist at the end…deliciously creepy…like the descriptors as well….chili pepper and feisty bull frog…
I couldn’t resist, when I saw the photo I was hit with inspiration, so to speak.
obsession
you did this so well
Thank you suz, and welcome!
You have the gift to write. The words flow beautifully with emotion.
Hi Debby…thank you so much for your lovely words {kissing hand}
Nice write!
Thanks, Tumblewords…and welcome!
Wow beautiful!
Glad you liked.
I spy the water can, my marker, and my heart attempts to jump out of my mouth like a …
My first time reading a magpie tale with full attention and absolute enjoyment…
u nailed it, very extraordinary and delicate descriptions…
your talent rocks here.
I love your short story.
Thanks Jingle, and nice to see you again!
hey cowboy – hmmmmm…..very well done! we all have those little secret paths – however, not all as littered with the remains of memories as yours seems – but, to each, his/her own!
Thank you gypsywoman…ha, I’m laughing thinking about what you said.
Beautifully written Brian!!! After reading this, I remembered My first…thanks for the memory…
HUG
Thanks Donna! Hopefully, your first didn’t meet the same fate.
Lovely bones go to heaven.. was the second as good? Is this guy a legend in his own mind? You did it….
err…thanks…I think?
Welcome Lyn!
Stephen King, step aside. There’s a new macabre Cowboy in town. Very effective, with some beautiful language leading up to the shocker at the end.
Dang, Patti…I think you came up with my new name…The Macabre Cowboy! Glad you enjoyed this little tale.
We all remember our firsts! (Says otin as he wipes off the bloody knife) lol
Ha…right on, Otin!
A creepy story but you told it beautifully.
Thanks Skye. I kinda like writing creepy stuff…
Okay, that was very, very creepy.
Creepy is good…right?
Another eerie one…I like it.
UP
Right on!
Your first of many…..hopefully. Well done!
Thanks Catherine, and welcome!
GROSS!!!! she doesn’t smell the same!
Hi Shirley, and welcome! Ha…yea, years buried in the ground will change the way you smell.
This is my first time here to you’re site. I’m glad I took the time to stop by and read you’re short story, very cool the way you wrote it. I really enjoyed how you wrote it through the killer’s perspective. Creepy and cool all at once, good job.
Hey there Wolf, welcome! If I can get creepy and cool at the same time, I’m doing something right…right?
Thanks Wolf.
Well…that was different…but in a good way… Love the style you wrote in! I love your short stories…and even though some are about being killed or being the killer…they are interesting and suspenseful and I love them! Another GREAT story!!
Thanks Kari Anne, glad you enjoyed this little tale.
Okay, wasn’t expecting that twist. Well written and had me hanging on but, very different…..
LOL…yea, I strive to be a little different, but I have to admit that this one was different even for me. Glad you liked it.
OMG- a serial killer??? First I was thinking it was his first tomato, then a woman and then!!! A killer? Hoo boy you got me there! Sneaky you!
Wow!
Welcome Kathe!
Yes, I admit I do try to have a twist in my short stories.
Glad you enjoyed this little tale.
I wished my first time had been this good! The twist here was brill. Yeehaa!
Hi Helena, and a BIG WELCOME!
Glad you likie…the yeehaa has me wondering if you’re a cowgirl…
I like your motercycle!
Hey there Blond Duck…thanks for the compliment…but I think you’re in the wrong room.
Whoa…I totally fell into your trap here, and then I suddenly found myself thinking, wow, this could either be really romantic or super creepy. I will go with creepy. You definitely captured the voice of this very poetic serial killer and sent some shivers down this gal’s spine.
Shivers are always good, especially down the spine.
Utterly fantastic!! I loved it!!
Glad you liked it, Raven!
Really creepy. Such sweet recollections of something so gruesome.
Yea, I agree…and to think it came out my head?
Well written……..
Nice and sensitive, too, for a “cowboy” urban or otherwise LOL!